Example Development Notes: top-quality, constructive feedback on the DANCES WITH WOLVES script.
““The Western may be a genre that has come in and out of fashion over the years, but this is a story that transcends it and speaks to our humanity.” Extracts from a script report by our Director of World Wide Development Ian Kennedy from his initial work with us, based on the DANCES WITH WOLVES script. The script can be found in our Produced Scripts Archive and is hosted at The Daily Script. (more…)
“Scandals intrigue people and this storyline is at the center of the script” – Extracts from a script report by our trainee Eirini Papadaki, based on a reading of AMERICAN BEAUTY found online at on The Daily Script website: CLICK HERE to read the script. (more…)
Last week, we confirmed Phillip Ramati as our winner for the UK Screenwriting contest for his script MADAME CAVELL. Phillip was one of the first people to enter this contest and for winning he receives a cash prize of £500, a year of free script development and mentoring worth over $3,200, and potential representation within the British industry to studios, producers, and commissioners.
Spotlight on Phillip Ramati…
Here’s some background information on Phillip:
“I have dual US/UK citizenship. I was an award-winning journalist for 21 years and now work for in public relations for a university. I am a former Disney/ABC Writing Fellowship finalist, made it to the Austin Film Festival second round with three different scripts, and finished in the Top 10% of Nicholl Fellowship scripts the last two years.”
Based on a true Story…
Phillip’s winning script, MADAME CAVELL, is based on true events that happened during World War I, and with our announcement of the results coming on the hundredth anniversary of the Battle of the Somme, this seems like a somewhat fitting winner.
Here’s more about the script in Philip’s own words.
“Based on a true story, British nurse Edith Cavell helped save hundreds of lives during World War I by smuggling English, French and Belgian soldiers out of Belgium to avoid capture. She was arrested, put on trial and executed, causing worldwide outrage.”
A huge thank you to everyone who entered to the competition! We received a lot of entries considering the recent inception of the contest, and the quality of the scripts was very high. Praise must also go out to our runners-up and semi-finalists – the full list of which, can be found here: https://writemovies.com/uk-screenwriting-competition-results/
Once again, congratulations to Phillip for his well-written and intriguing script.
By Ian Kennedy, WriteMovies Director of World Wide Development:
“You should never treat ‘non-selection’ as being ‘rejection’, only as a kind of feedback about how your script currently compares and competes against its rivals (on balance of risk, for producers)…” Ian’s tips and feedback on six months of scripts submitted to WriteMovies.
“There is tragic irony running throughout the script, with Paul being buried in a coffin and gradually being forced to accept that his life is over…” Extracts from a script report by our trainee Daniela Piper-Vegh, based on a reading of the script BURIED: CLICK HERE to read the script!
“The plethora of flashbacks that are added are beautifully incorporated into the flow of the dialogue and they always add up to the background of the story…” Extracts from a script report by our trainee Eirini Papadaki, based on a reading of the script THE 25TH HOUR: CLICK HERE (more…)
By Ian Kennedy, WriteMovies Director of World Wide Development:
Genre is so often key to convincing producers, and audiences, to take an interest in your story. Yet at the same time, I hear lots of writers and viewers complaining about formulaic, predictable, derivative stories that lack originality and interest precisely because of their adherence to a genre. So why does genre matter so much, for better and worse?
The more I’ve explored this subject – in my classes and meetings with writers, and in my own work – the clearer the subject has become to me. To my mind, genre exists – and works – because fundamentally, it tells us what kind of emotion we can expect to feel while we experience a certain story.
Here are a few famous genres, and the emotions that we can expect any good story in that genre to give us. The clearer and stronger the emotion, the more clearly it fits its overall genre – and this is why ‘genre stories’ work and appeal. But if a story belongs to one of these genres, and fails to generate the emotional effect that we expect, audiences will probably say it’s a bad story (even if they’re wrong and the film later goes on to become a cult classic!). Meanwhile, of course, you can blend several of these genres at once, to give audiences a new way of experiencing a familiar emotion – and doing so is often very successful at the box office. In any case, you’ll probably span a few of these emotional effects within any satisfying story, even if you don’t cross genre boundaries (for long).
- COMEDY – should give audiences laughter and humour.
- HORROR – fear.
- ACTION – excitement and danger, leading to elation and triumph.
- THRILLER – excitement, suspense.
- PSYCHOLOGICAL THRILLER – uncertainty and anticipation.
- SCIENCE FICTION, SUPERHEROES, and FANTASY, and also RELIGIOUS STORIES – awe and wonder – plus any of the other genre effects mentioned here (because more ordinary stories and genres and emotional effects are also present in every scene, within an exotic genre like this).
- DRAMA – is actually about concern (for better or worse) for other people (usually people who we’d like to feel are ‘like us’ in some important way!) and what will happen to them.
- MYSTERY – confusion and revelation.
- CRIME – fascination. Fascination with how other people can do things that we would like to convince ourselves are unthinkable. For audiences, the pleasure (or relief!) comes in the explaining, solving, and punishing, of the crimes we see. This is all true of gangster stories (such as in THE SOPRANOS) because the punishment and consequences for criminals who transgress or get unlucky is often administered internally by other gangsters and criminals rather than by external law enforcers. The automatically high stakes and consequences – for all characters at all times – plays a big role in making this subgenre so compelling.
- ROMANCE – love (even towards a character who isn’t real who we will never meet) and affection (towards the person of our own gender/circumstance who is aspiring towards that love interest).
It might seem counterintuitive at times, when we ask ourselves why audiences are drawn to particular genres that give them emotions which they would avoid in real life. But these questions often miss the point of why human beings are drawn to stories at all. Our own lives are usually quiet and unremarkable – in fact we’ll usually go to lengths to keep them that way. Which is why we rely on stories in order to take us into spaces and feelings that – to our relief – our own lives never will, so that we can still feel like we’re experiencing rounded and emotionally varied lives, even though we probably aren’t.
Endings are particularly interesting ways to play with audience expectations. Because – by that point – a story has already achieved the overall tone and emotion that audiences would expect, the writer has the opportunity to either elate us (with an uplifting ending) or sadden us (with a downbeat ending), or sometimes to challenge us with an indeterminate ending or cliffhanger. Because of the big uplift in audiences’ emotions, most writers and producers play it safe by giving us an upbeat ending. This is another key reason why we get frustrated with predictable happy endings, and feel that writers have stuck too closely to our expectations of the genre; unconvincing or indulgent happy endings feel like an insult to our intelligence. Downbeat endings are often more plausible and intellectually rewarding, but it’s a risk to take with our audience’s feelings – we can end up feeling hurt and betrayed, even bereft, when characters we care about are left to suffer or die.
So writers always need to remember what emotional effect they want to have on their audience – and what emotional effect their audience will be expecting a story of this type to have on them. This is at the heart of making every scene and every sequence work well. You can play with our expectations and surprise us – in fact you will probably need to – but the key to it is to still give us the emotional effect we expect, in a way that we wouldn’t have expected. And if you don’t respect and value the expectations that audiences will bring to your story, you’ll probably find that they soon feel the same way about you and whatever story you’ve arrogantly or complacently tried to palm them off with.
Suggestions for developing this in your work
- Think of other genres or subgenres not yet covered here. What emotional effects are at the heart of these genres?
- Think about the endings of successful stories in each genre. What emotional effect do they leave the audience with, at the moment when the audience leave the story again at the end? Why? What marks out the finest examples of the genre from the disappointing ones?
- Look at your past writing. Try to find the genre and emotional effect you most often try to bring about in your audiences. What does it tell you about your aspirations and priorities as a writer? How can that help you find your own distinctive voice and identity as a writer – the must-have quality that will lead producers to come to you when they want to achieve a certain effect or tone? What do you need to do with the style or genre that you favour, to elevate your writing – and particularly its effect upon the audience – to a level that its genre has never been before?
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